Clack: A Very Short Story Inspired By An Amazon Review

I tried to join in with Mikey Neumann’s challenge to write a story in 100 words, but I rambled over into 255. This story is inspired by a customer review of a product on Amazon – you’ll know which one if you’ve read it. I don’t have the link anymore so if anyone does please comment.

Clack. “I love you. Everything’s OK. I’m coming back.” Clack.

I don’t know what this place is. Everyone here looks so lost. They just sit there, in wheelchairs, looking lost. No-one’s helping them, and it’s heartbreaking, but I don’t know what I can do.

I wish I knew where Chris was. The bathroom? I want to ask him what we’re doing here, when we can leave.

It smells of, I don’t know, ointment. I don’t know which ointment, but it feels like it would be an ointment. I feel like the people here need a lot of ointment.

He’s taking a long time. I don’t know how long now. I have this after-image of him in that armchair, like he just got up for a second, but maybe he’s been gone a long time.

I’m worried now. I’m worried about me. I feel like this isn’t normal, not to know these things. I feel like I’m in a dream. I feel lost.

I suddenly realise there’s something in my hand. I don’t recognise it. It’s boxy and smooth and grey. My hands know it but I don’t know why and I’m scared and sick at how lost I am now.

I think Chris has gone. I think he’s just gone, and I’ll never know why or what I did wrong or what this place is.

My thumb is on a button and it wants to push it.

Clack. “I love you. Everything’s OK. I’m coming back to pick you up at six, same as always.”

6 Replies to “Clack: A Very Short Story Inspired By An Amazon Review”

  1. I vaguely remember some sort of microphone-recorder, marketed on an infomercial to the elderly, to help them remember things like where they parked their car/the time of appointments/etc. (IE, you press a button, record a message, and then when you press a different button the message play back). Might that have been what inspired this story? (Sorry, I too forgot its name)

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